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Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

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faromaers
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farmers
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vital
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for
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country
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 economy,to extend various
culters
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cultures
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 of profits and strongly with the
statment
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statement
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considred
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considered
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ancestors
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 of the public depends on the harvesting
culters
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cultures
culture
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technology improves,methods of it changed so much,many are using advanced technology like
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utilising tractors and
mechines
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machines
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cutdown
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 the crops,it shows
that
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how the nature of work changed from working with
manpoer
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manpower
 to continuing with
mechines
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machines
,
scientificaly
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scientifically
proven
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 that ,
falowing
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following
 natural organic method of harvesting is more
helathy
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healthy
 than ,using fertilizers,
moest
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most
 of the population like to have organic food which is healthier .
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 many are forming by the methods are not at all acceptable,which leads
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 issues,lack of
nutrientes
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nutrients
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etyologically
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etymologically
,if the crops are grown
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organic method buy using
organic
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the organic
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 method ,compost In
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 farmers are always key to the country
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