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Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school? What are the benefits of two education systems and what is better ?

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Students
 in some nations have to
study
 various fields until graduation,
while
 others must focus on a narrow
range
 of
subjects
 from fifteen years old.
Although
 the first
system
 brings diverse knowledge to its
students
, specializing in a limited
range
 seems to be better. Regarding the former
system
, schools will teach their
students
 the basic in every subject. It is believed that diverse knowledge can be used later in people's life.
For instance
, in Vietnam,
students
 must complete the basic education program in every subject before seeking specific jobs.
Furthermore
,
this
 kind of learning helps scholars know what subject they are actually good at.
Consequently
, career choices will be easier.
Although
 the
study
 in a wide
range
 of
subjects
 is good for the student's job choice, the other
system
 seems to be better. In terms of specialized
study
, scholars will only focus on a small number of
subjects
 to learn and develop. As people concentrate on a limited field, they will learn more professional knowledge of that field.
For instance
, almost every educational environment in developed countries follows
this
system
 and has a high-quality workforce.
Moreover
,
students
 can have more time for other activities like relaxing, sports or developing their soft skills. That kind of activity can improve the
study
 efficiency and academic performance of the
students
.
Thus
, focusing on a narrow
range
 of
subjects
 seems to be better than studying all. In conclusion,
although
 a
study
 in a wide
range
 of
subjects
 helps
students
 in choosing their jobs, I believed that a specialised
study
system
 is better as it can increase performance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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