Many people from rural areas moving to the cities. What problem can this cause? What can be solutions?

Nowadays
people
love to
move
themself to the
cities
for more
opportunity
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for
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live a better life
qualitiy
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quality
. So
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, in
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will elaborate
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problem and the solutions below.
To begin
with, the main problem of
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can be
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cause
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is that in the
cities
area
can be more
conjested
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congested
because when
people
try to
move
to the city that
have
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a
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limited space.
This
can make the
cities
alot
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a lot
more busy
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busier
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than before in the future.
For instance
, better
education
and
jobs
aways
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always
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be in the
cities
so it
make
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people
like
move
thier
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their
home from rural to find greater
of
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life opportunities and quality. So that the
cities
that have a good environment can be decreased by higher of
people
moving in.
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ways to
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solve
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the problem are the government should make the rural
area
to be able to create their own
jobs
and
the
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better
education
quality.
Firstly
, the government have to give
a knowledge
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to peoples in
rural
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the rural
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area
how
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to make
thier
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their
own
jobs
because if the
people
know to create
a
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jobs
in the future in the rural
area
will be more work opportunities
of
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local
people
to prevent them to
move
to the
cities
.
Secondly
,
education
is
the
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important factor to make
people
move
to the
cities
if we can set up the
education
systems in the rural
area
to become higher.
People
in rural will not need to
move
themself
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to study in the
cities
.
Lastly
, Both of the solutions that have been
suggest
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might not cover all the reasons that make
people
move
to the
cities
but if we make these solutions work
people
will feel more
appreiated
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appreciated
to live in
the
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rural. In conclusion, the majority of problems that make
people
move
to
cities
are to have a better quality of life that can not be found in the rural, so if we could make rural areas better all the problems might not happen.
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