Many people from rural areas moving to the cities. What problem can this cause? What can be solutions?

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Nowadays

people

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love to

move

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themself to the

cities

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for more

opportunity

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for

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live a better life

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quality

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will elaborate

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problem and the solutions below.

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with, the main problem of

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is that in the

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area

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can be more

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congested

because when

people

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try to

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to the city that

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limited space.

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can make the

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alot

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more busy

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than before in the future.

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, better

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and

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always

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be in the

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so it

make

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people

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move

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thier

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their

home from rural to find greater

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life opportunities and quality. So that the

cities

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that have a good environment can be decreased by higher of

people

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moving in.

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ways to

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the problem are the government should make the rural

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to be able to create their own

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and

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better

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quality.

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, the government have to give

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to peoples in

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the rural

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area

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how

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to make

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their

own

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because if the

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know to create

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apply

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jobs

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in the future in the rural

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will be more work opportunities

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for

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local

people

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to prevent them to

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to the

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education

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important factor to make

people

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move

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to the

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if we can set up the

education

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systems in the rural

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to become higher.

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in rural will not need to

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themself

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to study in the

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, Both of the solutions that have been

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might not cover all the reasons that make

people

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move

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to the

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but if we make these solutions work

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will feel more

appreiated

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appreciated

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rural. In conclusion, the majority of problems that make

people

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move

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cities

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are to have a better quality of life that can not be found in the rural, so if we could make rural areas better all the problems might not happen.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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