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environmental cases that can contribute to our nation

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I am Nurlaila Sahara Worabay. In 2021, I have completed my bachelor's degree in the field of
Chemistry
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 Education from Sebelas Maret University, Surakarta,
Indonesia
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. During my study, I was active as a
research
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 and
community
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 service assistant at
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 Education Department.
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 responsibility taught me much about the application and usefulness of
chemistry
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 for society.
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, I was
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 active in participating in some competitions regarding
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scientific writing and publishing journals. During competitions, I often raise the topic of
waste
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 plastic which is an environmental trouble that has become a big problem in the
water
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 ecosystem of
Indonesia
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. In 2021, World Population Review reported that
Indonesia
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 is in the fifth position of the most contributor of
waste
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 plastic in the world with as many as 56.333 tons. My interest in
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 cases has grown since I conducted
research
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 collaboration with the Environmental science and
Chemistry
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 Department in 2019. I have
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 participated in volunteer activities at ECONUSA (Nature-Culture-Conservation) 2020 and WALHI 2019.
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, I have experience visiting and observing about series of activities in some industries like Yakult and Cimory. When I joined the activities, I found that
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 troubles ,particularly plastics
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 lacking knowledge and the expensive of green materials.
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, social awareness is very crucial to increase their motivation to care about the environment.
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, environmentalists, NGOs, and government need to work together to empower the
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.
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 can increase societies' motivation to decline using plastic
waste
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 and encourage the
community
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 to care about the environment Realizing the importance of awareness for
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 troubles, I would like to pursue my education at the MSc Environmental Science University of Wageningen as the aim of
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 study is to produce environmental scientists with an interdisciplinary background who have the ability to cope with various environmental issues to reduce the severe effect in the future.
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,
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 program is ranked as one of the top environmental science in Europe.
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 program would develop my knowledge and problems solving as an environmental scientist to an advanced level. Meanwhile, it provides compulsory courses
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 Systems and Global Change and Modelling Future
Water
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 Stress.
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 I can take at least two optional courses
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 as; Climate Change Adaptation in
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 Management, and Natural Hazards and Disasters.
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,
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 study
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 opens more opportunities for me to obtain experience and expose me to international networks. I will conduct my
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 with a topic related to the concept of reducing pollution by using eco-friendly materials through the dissertation project. After studying in
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 program, I will be able to arrange a career as a lecturer at my campus with polymer expertise.
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, I will create a polymer
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 group that gathers students, practitioners, and academics to focus on the invention and innovation of eco-friendly materials to reduce using conventional polymers.
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, I could devote myself to joining the
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 towards ECONUSA through campaigns and socialization about the effects of pollution on humans and other microorganisms. I hope to be in the future to contribute to
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’s efforts to produce a better environment toward a free pollution
Indonesia
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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