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Some people think that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the benefits of this outweigh the problems?

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Some
people
 think that we should invent a new
language
 for international
communication
.
while
 I think the
benefits
 do not outweigh the problems. on the one hand, inventing a new
language
 for international
communication
 may lead to some advantages ,
firstly
, inventing a new
language
 can improve
communication
 between different cultures because
people
 can use the same
language
 to communicate with each other which makes
communication
 easier.
secondly
, when
people
 all over the world use the same
language
 ,it can reduce the
language
 barrier,
therefore
 ,
people
 can share each other ideas and opinions more correctly, because they do not distinguish the meanings of the words,
moreover
 ,it can increase the different countries' cooperation.
however
 ,inventing a new
language
 for international
communication
 have some
benefits
 , but I think the problems overweight the
benefits
.
firstly
, it may lead to some challenges in the science field,
for instance
, scientists need to spend much time using the new
languages
 to express the chemical elements, which is not good for scientific development.
secondly
,it may threaten some small
languages
,
for example
 ,if
people
 need to speak the global
languages
 to get better opportunities
such
 as employment and education ,
therefore
 ,some minority
language
 speakers believe study global
languages
 so that no one chose to study their own minority
languages
 ,it erodes their cultural identity.
finally
,if
people
 speak global
languages
 for long periods ,it affects social stability. in conclusion, I think inventing a new
language
 for international
communication
 and the problems outweigh the
benefits
.
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