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people's shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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With the advancement and diversification of the production industries,
people
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 are bending more toward shopping as there are varieties of
goods
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 available in the
market
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. The luring, vivid advertisements are one of the major reasons
people
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 are attracted for buying new items even after already having the same thing with them. Some assert that shopping
behavior
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 varies with the
age
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 of the
people
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 and some claim against it. I mostly agreed with the given prompt above and
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 essay will be in support of the produced statement.
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 with, on the one hand, Looking at the global
market
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, youth-based
products
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 are predominant. Whenever we go shopping, though there are other
goods
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 in the
market
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, mostly wholesalers and retailer shops are full of
goods
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 for adults and children especially fashion and cosmetic
products
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. The predominance of
age
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-targeted
products
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 is clear evidence that shopping habits are influenced by
age
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 group.
for example
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, the youth of the
age
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 between 15 to 35 tend to buy
goods
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 frequently as compared to the
age
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 below 15 and above 50.
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 means that compared to old
age
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people
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, the youth prefer to go shopping more.
On the other hand
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,
age
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 group
also
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 affects the choice of the product or product types. The god that the youth buy for themselves will be dramatically different from the product that the old
age
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 and children buy.
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, Mostly, when children are taken shopping, they are more inclined to buy toys and gaming
products
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,
whereas
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 adults choose to get new branded materials
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 as clothing, cosmetics, smartphone, bikes, cars, etc. for show-off among peers.
Thus
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, the choice of shopping
also
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 depends on the kind of
age
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 group referred to. In conclusion, the quantity, variety, and frequency of shopping are greatly influenced by the
age
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 of the buyer; but
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 is not the single factor that shopping habits depend on. It depends on a number of factors
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 as economic class,
market
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 accessibility, profession, education, etc.
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