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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table illustrates the total number of
people
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 who are interested in exhibitions at Ashdown
Museum
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 during the
year
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 before and after renovation. The pie charts provide information about the sorts of
people
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's satisfaction with the place.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 during the
year
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 after renovating the Ashdown
Museum
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 has a larger number of
people
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 much more than during the
year
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 pre-renovation,
while
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 the dissatisfied factors from the
year
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 before re-building the
museum
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is
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are
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 the highest rate of survey information. In terms of surveys of
people
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's feelings, the dissatisfied sector from the
year
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 before re-building the
museum
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 is the highest rate, accounting for 40
people
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, followed by
people
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 who feel very dissatisfied 30
people
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.
In contrast
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, the
year
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 after renovation, the
people
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 who are satisfied are the largest numbers which
are
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is
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 40
people
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.
Moreover
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, there had the same numbers of
people
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 who feel no response about renovation both before and after refurbishment
According to
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 the number of visitors to Ashdown
Museum
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, there has 92,000
people
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 visited the
museum
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 during the
year
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 after refurnishment which is much more than the
year
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 before re-building which is 18,000
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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