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Learning to play team sports is an important part o f a child’s education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Apart from
this
, another part considers that in the rural
lives
 are more
favorable
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 for
children
 than cities
furthermore
, most experts believe that
this
 type
life style
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lifestyle
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 is good
at
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for
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 our
children
 and
also
as a result
 of many
researches
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types of research
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 we can get some reports. The reports said that these
children
 are healthier and less to be obese so in the
village
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lives
 are so lively
that is
 why the
children
's bodies protect themselves more effectively.
For instance
, we take a family
who
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they
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apply
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are living in the
village
 and if we can observe their
lives
, we will see their daily
lives
 so they have active living
besides
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, these parents spend much time
for
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 their
children
.
Therefore
, we saw that their family bond was stronger than the family
live
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 in
city
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the city
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. the city.
As a consequence
, we knew that living in the
village
 is more convenient than those living in
city
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the city
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. In conclusion, some people consider that the best method for offspring to bring up in town because they think that there are many possibilities which are nurtured, cured and
also
 financed
however
 others believe that life in the
village
 is more compatible and healthy
therefore
 another part to
choose
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 bring up a child in the
village
.
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