The chart shows number of students who choose different subjects at university in 2005.

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select various themes at university in 2005.

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, it can be

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that the graph shows about

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the rate

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of subject and compare

men

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and female.

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men

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science, at the same time

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female

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females

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reach a peak in the social

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sciences

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, there are many

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subjects

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but languages and

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are small

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mathematics

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sicience

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science

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literature have a huge rate so, were used by

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majority

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subjects

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in the themes . The

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science and

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literature number is 20%, 22% and 16% respectively. At the same time, the female

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tremendous percentage in three

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such

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as social sciences, languages and

literatures

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literature

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in addition

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, the quantity is

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26%, just under twenty and just above

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ten respectively.

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, the social sciences, humanities, arts and law are a small percentage

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16%, 12%, 4% and 11%

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men

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contrast

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the female take

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some

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as arts,

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, law and

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science. There

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a tiny percentage that

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female and

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properly

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rate is

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10%, 5%, just above

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five % and 11%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, mathematics, subjects with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

203 words

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