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obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

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Well,
obesity
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 is increasing day by day among all individuals especially juveniles because of
obesity
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, there could be raised more health problems. Parents should take care of their kids. I will describe my viewpoints with reasons and solutions in the upcoming paragraphs. First and foremost, there are multifarious causes behind
obesity
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,
people
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 spend a lot of time on electronic devices owing to
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, they do not go outdoors for other activities or games
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, crowds suffer from
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 because
people
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 do not do any kind of physical exercise.
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, in
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 modern society, many
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 like to eat
junk
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food
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 from outside restaurants and they do not prefer to eat homemade
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 and fast
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 includes plentiful spices so when folks eat that
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then
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 they easily get
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 from
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food
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, a recent survey found that 65% of
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 eat outside
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 and they do not have sufficient time to cook at home. So they quickly suffer from
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.
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 hand, every problem has solutions.
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, parents should not allow their offspring to eat outside
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 and they give them homemade
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 so that, children can avoid
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food
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, parents must include more salads and fruits in their kid's lunch or dinner because children can get good habits to eating homemade
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 from their childhood and
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 age is perfect for them to learn anything.
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, health authorities should do inspections of restaurants on time and they should make sure that restaurants provide fresh
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 to their customers. To recapitulate, fast
food
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 is not safe for everyone and
people
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 must avoid
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food
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As well as
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, they should include more salads , vegetables and fruits in their
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