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In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can art tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

The development of
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 and
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 has been significant for the past few decades.
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, it has not replaced
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 yet and
people
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 still enjoy their spare time with
arts
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such
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 as music,
paints
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 and books. I believe that these
arts
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 pull
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’s heartstrings and that
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 of things can be made by only human beings. Humans’ feelings are very complicated, and
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 why it makes
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 give
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 a lot of
inspirations
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. First of all,
artists
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 can share their life experiences that
science
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 and
technology
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 can not.
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, many books include histories or authors’ real experiences. Even if it is created stories, that could blow readers’ minds and expand their views. Reading gives them a chance to gain more knowledge and rethink
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their lives.
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 to
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, The lyrics of songs are the gathering of messages,
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 as sympathy and encouragement. These messages often attract listeners.
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, the
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 can interact with
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,
whereas
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science
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 and
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 have difficulty
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communicating with
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.
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, live festivals are the interaction between
audience
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 and musicians and that leads to a feeling of
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connection. In terms of paints, how you feel the paints
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 on the person and it makes
people
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 think that it is no problem to be different from others. In conclusion,
arts
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 are still a part of our life,
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science
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 and
technology
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 have been sophisticated. In my opinion,
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 is because
artists
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 can expand
our
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 views through their pieces of work and feel a connection with them.

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