Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same product anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, importing and exporting between communities are becoming more popular and people
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to any nation can purchase
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from anywhere in the world. I agree that it positive development
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its drawbacks are more than
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, developing a world into
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Village has a significant effect on culture
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on tourism.
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and foods that
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in Pakistan. If these things
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provide them at their home town they will not come
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. So these things
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the economy of
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been living in
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countries they feel no feelings for their land
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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