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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

#countries #people #products #world
Needled to say that it is undeniable fact globalisation is coming more and more
everyday
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. I completely agree with the view that
people
 can buy their
product
 anywhere, convenience the customers and can help
people
 suffering from
lack
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a lack
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 of
must have
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must-have
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a product
the product
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product
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products
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.
To begin
 with,
this
 phenomenon
convince
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 the consumer when the
product
 is widely available in multiple regions and countries customers can purchase the items regardless
where
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of where
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 they are.
This
 can be
speasily
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easily
 helpful for those who
living
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 in multiple locations
who
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and
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relay
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rely
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 on
constancy
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the constancy
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 and availability of the
product
 where they go.
In addition
, buying the same products everywhere
,
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 can give an opportunity to customers
campare
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compare
 prices
make
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to make
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 the best purchasing
dicession
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decision
. Some
people
 argue that globalisation can have a negative effect on
culture
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the culture
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 and tourism
industy
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industry
 in some countries. They may argue that
availability
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the availability
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 of foreign products can cause local products to disappear which can impact
on
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apply
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cultural identity and reduce the
attractivness
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attractiveness
as
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of
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 a tourist.
For instance
, with the growth of forging clothes in
India
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,India
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 the popularity of Indian clothes reduce significantly.
Nonetheless
,
government
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the government
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 can decrease
this
 problem by seeing
up
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apply
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some exhibitions as
tourist
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a tourist
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attraction
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attractions
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 to show
speasial
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special
 goods. In
conclusions
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conclusion
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,
i
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I
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belived
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believed
believe
 that globalization
facilate
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facilitates
people
 all over the world.
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