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Many feel that students today should learn practical skills at school such as car maintenance and managing a bank account. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some believe that useful
skills
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 should be taught
in addition
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 to the standard curriculum. In my opinion, school is a place to learn academic
subjects
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. Proponents of practical
skills
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 can point out that they make
students
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 more well-rounded. The majority of
students
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 graduating from high school are good at some academic
subjects
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such
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 as algebra, anatomy, and classic literature. Most of them,
however
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, feel embarrassed when confronting problems in real
life
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.
For example
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, many Vietnamese
students
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 are unable to cook until they become
undergraduate
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, and they have to leave their hometown and move to another city to study for a bachelor’s degree. They recognise that
subjects
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 are not useful in their
life
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 and, without attention, eventually fade
in
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 their mind.
Otherwise
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, practical
skills
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 can be fresh in their mind
due to
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 repeated application and having some tangible impacts. Despite the valid argument detailed above, I assert that useful
life
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skills
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 can be learnt at home
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 schools are the best place to teach academic
subjects
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. Take cooking
skills
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,
for example
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. Many
students
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 can cultivate these
skills
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through
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by
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 searching the Internet, asking their parents and even learning by
trials
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 and
errors
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In contrast
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, schools are filled with experts in their
skill
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skills
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, only available at
this
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 time of their
life
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.
To accumulate
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 knowledge from their experts may or may not be directly useful but
this
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 is an opportunity to learn about a wide breadth of
subjects
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 that inform an individual's long-term intellectual
life
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. Câu cuối lủng củng In conclusion, I believe practical
skills
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 are important but should not detract from the true purpose of schooling. These
skills
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 can be taught at school only if they are related to academic
subjects
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.

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