The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph reveals the number of both male and female members in a gym for 30 years; from 1980 to 2010. In general,
men
recorded an Use synonyms
overall
fall through Linking Words
wide ranged
ups and downs Add a hyphen
wide-ranged
while
Linking Words
women
saw Use synonyms
gradual
increasing trend to the point where it eventually outnumbered Add an article
a gradual
the gradual
male’s
Change noun form
male
figure
over the designated Fix the agreement mistake
figures
time-scale
.
In 1980, 1000 Correct your spelling
time scale
of
Change preposition
apply
women
were members of the gym Use synonyms
whereas
the twice amount of Linking Words
men
Use synonyms
were
. In Change the verb form
was
following
five years, both sexes reflected Correct article usage
the following
upward
trend to reach respective double figures compared to its proceeding data had Correct article usage
an upward
resistered
. Correct your spelling
registered
However
, in the next decade, mele’s figure plummeted to stand at approximately 1600. Linking Words
On the other hand
, Linking Words
figure
of Add an article
the figure
a figure
women
remained Use synonyms
its
growing momentum and surpassed that of Change preposition
in its
men
to be Use synonyms
the
verge of reaching 3000 at the same time.
After 1995, Change preposition
on the
men
recovered Use synonyms
its
reduction, and Change preposition
from its
furthermore
, their number Linking Words
skyrocketted
to hit their peak at 5000. Correct your spelling
skyrocketed
Nevertheless
, Linking Words
at
the final term, they dramatically plunged, getting Change preposition
in
its
trough at roughly 600 in 2010. As for Correct pronoun usage
their
women
,they fructuated ranged between about 2300 and 2800 for the first 21st Use synonyms
century’s
decade, Change noun form
century
although
they marked around 1900 in the Linking Words
last
data.Linking Words
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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