The chart below shows the current percentages of world land cover by type. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the current percentages of world land cover by type. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates how the current
world
land
consists of different types of elements.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there
are
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total
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of eight categories that exist. Livestock farms and forests take up almost half of the
world
's
land
cover,
while
built-up areas and freshwater cover the least. First of all, 27% of the
world
's
land
is covered by livestock farms. The following are forests, which account for 26%. Barren
land
is the third large coverage of the
world
land
, and the figure for
this
is 19%.
Therefore
, slightly over 70% of
world
land
is covered by those three categories.
Next,
glaciers, shrubland, and cropland each consist of 10%, 9%, and 7% of total
land
cover respectively.
Finally
, built-up areas and freshwater take up the least amount of coverage, and the figure for each element is 1%.
In other words
,
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the r.est
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rest
of the categories except for livestock farms, forests, and barren
land
account for nearly 30% of the total coverage.
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