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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The tables compare the trends of the
temperature
 and period of daytime in two cities
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London
 and
Sydney
 from Friday, December 28th to Sunday, December 30th 2018.
Overall
,
London
 experienced a stable remaining in
temperature
 over
weekend
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, but those of
Sydney
 rose steadily.
Additionally
, the sun of
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 city rose sooner than
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London
's one, but it set later than
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London
's sunset over the period surveyed.
Temperature
, the lowest figure of the English capital was recorded minimum at 3C on Saturday, compared to
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 17C for
Sydney
 on Friday.
While
 the
temperature
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 maximum at 13C in the UK on Saturday,
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Sydney
 was at 31C on Sunday. During the weekend, the numbers of England's
temperature
 remained stable;
by contrast
, a gradual increase in
this
 could be seen in
Sydney
. Regarding
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daylight, the time that
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sun rose at about 8:06 over those days in
London
,
whereas
Sydney
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 in it at around 5:45. Meanwhile the sunset of British city was reported at about 16:00,
this
 of economic city in Australia was recorded at 20:07.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, london, sydney, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The tables compare
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • ranged from
  • consistently high
  • slight increase
  • remained stable
  • significantly fewer
  • enjoyed
  • overall
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