The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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the bar chart compares the average spending per week of
families
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in one country from 8 things in the years 1968 and 2018.
overall
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, it is clear from the bar chart that
familes
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families
spent the most on food and spent the less on fuel and power in 1968.
whereas
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they spent the most on leisure and spent the least on personal
goods
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and fuel in 2018. in 1968,
families
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in
this
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country spent 35 % of their weekly income on food which was higher than spent on other essentials. the numbers of weekly spending on housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
for people were both at 10%.
also
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, the figures for household
goods
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, personal
goods
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and transport were 7.5%
while
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families
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spent on leisure just slightly higher than them( about 8%). in 2018,
families
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spent the most on leisure,
while
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spent
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the least on fuel (about 4%) and personal
goods
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(about 4%). the expenditures on housing and transport increased to around 19% and around 14% respectively.
by contrast
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,
families
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considerably reduced their
weeky
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weekly
spending on food, from 35% to 16%.
familles
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families
spent on household
goods
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still remained at 7.5% compared to
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1968. clothing
an
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and
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footware
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footwear
consisted of 5% of the weekly income.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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