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immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reason immigration. To what consequences it can lead?

#immigration #impact #society #reason #consequences
these days,
a
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number
 of
people
 leaving their countries
has
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 increased. There are many reasons for
people
 to immigrate to another
country
.
This
 essay will discuss
major
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the major
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 impact of immigration,
reasons
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the reasons
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 and consequences for migration. First of all, the main reason for
people
 moving to another
country
 is
economy
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 facts. Lots of students prefer studying abroad
due to
 better conditions, the
government
 offer
higher
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a higher
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 scholarship for young
people
 who wants to
study
in
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at
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 their university. The
government
 encourage youth to
study
 in their
country
's universities and suggest a few conditions for them,
such
 as high scholarship, letting students
to
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be an intern in their future job and it helps them to get knowledge and experience in their sphere.
For instance
,
Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic let students
to
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study
 in universities for free If they know and
study
state
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 language, It is an example
for
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of
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adventegous
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advantageous
adventurous
 motivation.
The
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 positive side
, immigration
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is, immigration
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help
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 the
government
 to develop their
country
. A lot of
specialist
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specialists
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 move to perspective countries to get new knowledge and degree and generally after graduating from
university
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,university
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 they stay in that
country
. It contributes
increasing
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 the
number of
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population and the
number
 of
high
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 qualified workers.
On the other hand
, the massive amount of immigration can speed up
pollution
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the pollution
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the
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of the
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 air.
For example
, China has the biggest
number of
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apply
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population in the world. It means that
people
 use lots of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and
due to
this
 fact, we can find out that there
are
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is
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a
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huge pollution
the
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in the
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 air. In conclusion, I want to say that the
government
 contributes
people
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to people
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 leaving or moving to another
country
.
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