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1.Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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As we all know, Every people want to feel
peacefully
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. Unfortunately
number
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 of
criminal
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 in the World has been increasing so it makes us feel bad. İn my opinion, The main reason for these problems depends on the background of the individuals. Now let's talk about
solutions
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 to
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 issue and
reasons
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. First of all,
i
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 would like to tell about
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 number of youth
criminals
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. There might be several
reasons
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 for the criminal background.
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 investigators underdeveloped countries have more susceptibility to crime.
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, we can say that crimes are related to their social life and childhood.
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,
criminals
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 who do not have the necessary education are approximately more %78 than other people. if we talk about
solutions
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, humans need to improve their education level.
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, punishments should be harder. Especially, if imprisonment rises, the number of
criminals
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 may reduce. in conclusion,
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 is very significant for people. As I mentioned before, there are many
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 behind the crimes. we should investigate the background of the crime as government and the public. we must consider
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 because There is a
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solutions
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as well as
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reasons
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. I firmly believe that
criminals
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 will reduce day by day.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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