1.Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

As we all know, Every people want to feel
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. Unfortunately
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of
criminal
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in the World has been increasing so it makes us feel bad. İn my opinion, The main reason for these problems depends on the background of the individuals. Now let's talk about
solutions
to
this
issue and
reasons
. First of all,
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would like to tell about
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number of youth
criminals
. There might be several
reasons
for the criminal background.
According to
investigators underdeveloped countries have more susceptibility to crime.
On the other hand
, we can say that crimes are related to their social life and childhood.
For example
,
criminals
who do not have the necessary education are approximately more %78 than other people. if we talk about
solutions
, humans need to improve their education level.
in addition
, punishments should be harder. Especially, if imprisonment rises, the number of
criminals
may reduce. in conclusion,
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is very significant for people. As I mentioned before, there are many
reasons
behind the crimes. we should investigate the background of the crime as government and the public. we must consider
solutions
because There is a
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as well as
reasons
. I firmly believe that
criminals
will reduce day by day.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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