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Global warming is now generally agreed to be a very serious problem . what are the causes of hlobal warming and what should governments do to reduce it

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First of all, I would like to say something which is the most important thing in the World. Nowadays, global warming has been rising with population. Population in the World is increasing in parallel
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 the increase in human needs. What I mean is, our natural sources are decreasing day by day.
Therefore
, people may consider that thing which is vital and dangerous for our health and our future. At
this
 point, we can talk about the importance of sustainability.
Secondly
, global warming has no advantages but disadvantages. There are a lot of disadvantages which are drought, lack of
water
 and global warming. We may lose our
water
 resources what I mean is our glaciers are melting so we should be more careful when using a drink. We should use less
water
 to avoid wastage
such
 as
while
 brushing our teeth and taking showers, washing cars, and watering the gardens. To cut a long story short we should not be extravagant with the usage of
water
.
On the other hand
, if the temperature increases we may lose agricultural resources. As I mentioned before, We have to consider sustainability. Sustainable life improves our way of living, does not it?
For instance
, we save our natural sources and energy.
This
 situation is the most vital for the next generation.
Finally
, Global warming and sustainability are the most vital things in our life. As I stated before people should consider
this
 subject. If I had the power to change the World, absolutely I would protect our globe. I would teach humans how can we use our resources.
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