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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and work. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problem it will cause.

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First of all, I would like to tell you about something which is the most important thing in the World. Nowadays,
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 has been improving day by day what I mean is automation is moving very rapidly.
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 will bring some advantages and disadvantages. We can say the benefits of machinery are increasing in parallel to improve
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, we have to consider bringing some problems with automation. At
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point we can talk about the importance of
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. A lot of communities want to have more free
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 for spending with their family, friends, and social life not they? Every people have to work for earning money because if we do not have enough money we can not spend
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 with our family pleasantly. Huge companies invest millions of dollars in machines because they want to reduce working humans.
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 an increasing number of machines a lot of people will be employed. the increasing number of unemployed may cause robbery, famine, and maybe war. At
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 point, companies should be solution-oriented. Developing
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 should give people more free
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 way, society may improve their culture, language, and knowledge. As I stated before there will be more
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 to spend with the family. if I had the power to change the world, Absolutely I would make society live more comfortably. To cut a long story short the future is in our hands. I hope that we will leave a better future for our children
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