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the line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

the line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
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The Line graph illustrates the number of
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 that a European country consumes four different kinds of meats over a 23-year
period
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 from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was only an increase in the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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,
while
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 the
consumption
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 of
beef
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,
lamb
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, and fish decreased in the given
period
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. At the beginning of the
period
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,
beef
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 was the
most eaten
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 meat with about 220
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. After that, despite a fluctuation, the amount of
beef
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 consumed every
week
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 by a
person
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 continue to decrease-, and stood at 110
grams
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 per
week
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. The second most consumed meat in 1979 was
chicken
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 with just below 150
grams
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 per individual per
week
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. in stark contrast to
beef
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,
chicken
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 has become more popular throughout the
period
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. There was a steady increase in the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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, reaching almost 250
grams
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 of
chicken
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 per
week
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 consumed by each individual in that country. A downtrend has
also
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 been seen in the
consumption
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 of
lamb
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. In 1979 150
grams
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 of
lamb
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 was consumed by each
person
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 per
week
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.
This
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 number continued to decrease, and by the end of the
period
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, the
consumption
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 of
lamb
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 was only about 60
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, person, week, period, consumption, chicken, beef, lamb with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • meat
  • increase
  • decrease
  • popularity
  • steady
  • stable
  • significant
  • period
  • type
  • contrast
  • decline
  • greatest
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