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‏Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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In recent years, more than more
students
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 going abroad to study. In spite of that fact studying in foreign bring benefit, getting drawbacks is undeniable. There are many reasons
students
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 studying abroad should be encouraged, First of all,
this
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 is a
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specially
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 experience for
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the student
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student
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students
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 to meet different
culture
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 circumstances,
that
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 can improve
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student
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students
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 international
perspective
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perspectives
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creative
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 new cognition apply in future.
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 studying abroad
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this
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is
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a long-term
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 investment,
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have
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 a foreign qualification
provide
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 more opportunities to get good pay job. Resulting in higher income and well
quality
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the quality
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 of life.
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,
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 overseas brings so many
benefit
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benefits
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, that had
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. First economic problems, studying abroad need to prepare
many
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 money to cover tuition, living and
eat
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eating
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, despite school can support
scholarship
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scholarships
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, many
students
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 struggle paid to
living
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. Second mental issues, different culture and language problems lack
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 connection, rise
loneliness
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 and social isolation, lead to
increase
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an increase
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student
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in student
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 depression
diagnosis
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. In conclusion, even though studying abroad still had drawbacks,
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 in my opinion studying abroad
advantages
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 more than disadvantages. Studying foreign can involve different
culture
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cultures
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, that a nice experience for
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the student
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student
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students
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, for long-term investment benefits outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 to encourage
students
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 should study in foreign countries.
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