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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things

#space #exploration #money
It is argued that space research is just the worst of
money
, so
this
money
 should be invested in something else. I totally agree with
this
 statement and I believe that cash can be used up for significant things and problems. First of all, I believe that humanity has many problems even on Earth and
money
 must be spent on these issues. There are plenty of hardships
such
 as global warming,
education
 issues, and the war between RUSSIA and Ukraine. If to take
education
 issues as an example, African children are needed in
education
 which doesn't provide for Africa.
Due to
 the economics of
this
 continent, they can not study, and
furthermore
, they can not eat and sleep in normal homes like average Europeans. That's why the
money
 has to be consumed for problems for our planet and humanity.
Secondly
, I think science is not developed to explore SPACE. Elon Musk had wasted about 15 billion dollars attempting for the rocket to take off.
However
 he reached what he wanted, but the result is just a working rocket that can not reach Mars or another planet. To improve our science level, we need to have more qualitative
education
 which is lead to my first problem.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that humanity is wasting
money
 on spacefaring which could be used to solve local difficulties.
Submitted by 29th of april on

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  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
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  • rationale
  • dedicating
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