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Children are now watching more television than they have ever done before. - What are some of the negative effects of children watching a lot of television? Do you think young children should be allowed to watch television?

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Millions of new
books
 are published every year.
E-
books
 and
audio-
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books
 replace
paper
books
 and printed editions.
This
 is a good step forward,
development
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 and progress in learning. Many people think that it is a positive development but I don`t think so.
Nevertheless
, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
Firstly
,
e-
books
 are harmful
for
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to
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 health, they damage eyesight. They have a bad influence on the nervous system, causing irritability and headache.
Secondly
,
e-
books
 don't evoke feelings and emotions.
Paper
books
 have a special atmosphere and smell. When you are reading a
paper
 book you can imagine yourself in the place of the characters, you can dive into the book.
Also
, new
paper
books
 always smell great and you can feel how well new pages are turning.
Paper
books
 were, are and will be more popular than
e-
books
. Despite these flaws,
e-
books
 have some benefits.
E-
books
 are so comfortable to use, you can have a million
books
in
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 one device.
Paper
books
 are expensive these days. As well, you needn't spend a big amount of money to buy
paper
books
. You can take your e-book anywhere you want, it's good for studying and working. In conclusion,
e-
books
 have some benefits and flaws and
paper
books
too
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. I think for some people the rapid development of
e-
books
 has become very convenient and attractive. For other people,
paper
books
 have a special value. P-
books
 cause unique feelings and emotions. I adore
paper
books
 and will never change them for
e-
books
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