Some people belive that the death penalty should be abolished. Other belive that it is necessary for certain crime. Discuss both sides and gives your opinio.

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Some people argue that the death
penalty
should never be used
while
other believe that it
is require
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for heinous crimes.
This
essay will discuss
the
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both point of view. To
beging
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begin
with,
Criminal
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criminals
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who have been involved
of
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in
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major offences
such
as kidnapping
murder
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and murder
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should be dealt with very seriously.The
penalty
for
such
act
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acts
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of violence should be swift.
This
will send a strong message to the public of a country. It will remind
that
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us that
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the consequences are very harsh and
this
message will help to reduce
henious
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heinous
crimes.
For example
,
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in saudi
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saudi
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arabia
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, who are the made up punishment for murder is
immedeatly
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immediately
immediate
death.
On the other hand
,some disagree and feel that the law should not be
practiced
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. Because
of
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human life is precious and considered
as
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a gift of
allah
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.someone
also
beleive
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believe
that taking
someone
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life is
very
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barbaric act,no matter what the reason is.
Aditionally
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Additionally
, in the case of
mejor
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major
felonies , few argue that the convicted
persone
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person
should be given another chance to change
themselve
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themselves
.
For example
,
james
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James
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who
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is currently 32
years
old. When he was 8
years
old, he murdered
an innocent women
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innocent women
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without realizing it.
Then
a few
years
back the court announced that
james
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sentens
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sentence
sentences
was reduce
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to 5
years
.Now is working
an
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administration office and he has proven himself to be a good citizen. In
conclusio
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conclusion
, many people support the capital
penalty
for serious crimes
whereas
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but
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others disagree
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disagree
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with it. In my opinion,
although
both arguments
is
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right
but
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the capital
penalty
must be used to ensure the
saftey
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safety
of
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the countr
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countr
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country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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