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children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. few people believe taht goverment has the responsibility to solve this problem. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#children #people #taht #goverment #responsibility
Nowadays ,
the
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obesity and junk food
has
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 been
a
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great
concerns
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 among youth. And I agree that the government should intervene in
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the officials should start
the
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programmes in the schools that should include various sessions like
,
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 video training and lectures which deals with the harmful effects of overweight and unhealthy food among children.
For example
,
in
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india
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India
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 report suggests that around 80
percent
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 of the youth is suffering from
cholestrol
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cholesterol
 and heart attacks at
young
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 age.
Furthermore
, the government and parents should come together and motivate their kids to indulge in sports activities like running,swimming etc.
This
 will not only help children to control their weight but it will
also
 make them competitive in their life which will lead them to live
a successful lives
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.
To conclude
with
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,
i
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 would say that the government and parents should help their children to understand the harmful effects of consuming unhealthy foods and
consequences
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the consequences
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 of being overweight.
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