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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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Being a freelancer is one of the most trending passions in the world.
People
 tend to choose
self
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 -
employments
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employment
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 because of many reasons ,
such
 as financial profits and competition in the job market. The reasons for my observations and
potential
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 drawbacks of
this
 trend will be discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,it is important to have enough money for
day
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the day
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today
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to day
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 expenditures.
People
 sometimes think that
,
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 they can have more profit from
the
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their
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 own business or employment , because extra
expensesare
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expenses are
expenses
 less.
For example
 ,salaries and partnership charges should not be allocated.
Secondly
,having a subject-related job is essential for
self
-satisfaction,but
due to
 growing competition in the
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employment
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employment
employement
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employment
 market ,it is hard to find
work
 which goes with
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self-interest
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self-interest
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self interest
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.
For instance
,one of my friends who
was
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graduated as an accountant ended up as a human
resourse
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resource
resources
 manager.
Therefor
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,most
of
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the
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apply
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people
 tend to be a
self
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employee
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employees
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instead
 of doing
work
 for a company or other employer. When considering negative effects,responsibility should be taken as first.In
this
 kind of
situation
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 they have to cope with
work related
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work-related
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 stress because everything depends on one person.
Therefore
 ,it might negatively affect
on
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someone's mental and physical well-being.
For example
,if I do my own business,I should concern about every stage of it and sometimes I would not have enough free time to
be
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relaxed.
In addition
 to that,company employees are
financially
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more financially
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 secure than
self
-employees.They just have to do their
work
 and end of the month they will be paid.But when doing freelance
work
 financial security is less.
For instance
,
due to
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pandamic
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pandemic
,most
of
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the
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apply
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self related
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self-related
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 businesses were closed.If someone
want
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 to be a
self-employee
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self-employed
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 they should
concern
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be concern
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 about negative outcomes
such
 as limited free time and insecure income. In conclusion,
people
 try to do their own
work
 because they could not find a job
according to
 their personal interests and the amount of money which they can earn.
Although
,there is a trend to be freelance workers they have to face negative effects
such
 as mental stress and financial insecurity.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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