Nowadays food travels thousands of miles before reaching consumers. It affects the agriculture and economy of the destination country, and for this reason, people should prefer food produced by local farmers. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include examples from your experience.

Food
is an essential item needed for the survival of humanity as it is one of the basic needs of life. In times past, people produced their own
food
within their location without relying on imported
food
.
However
, with the advent of globalisation, there
have
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been a rise in the consumption of
food
items made
from
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other countries.
This
implies that the distance
food
substances travel in order to get to their consumers
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greatly increased and because of
this
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the agricultural and economic sectors of the countries involved are affected.
Due to
this
, communities are encouraged to consume
food
products produced locally by their
farmers
. I agree with
this
proposition because of some reasons which I will
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in
this
essay.
Firstly
, it promotes economic growth for the nation. The economic state of any nation is largely influenced by the quantity of what they import or export and when there is more importation than exportation, the economy may tilt towards the negative side of the scale. Encouraging individuals to consume locally sourced foods means that there will be
increase
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in demand and the
farmers
can produce more
with
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less cost and
therefore
, will not have to depend on imported
food
to meet their agricultural and feeding needs. Some of the
surplus
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may even be exported in order to generate revenue for the country.
For example
, Nigeria was known to have had a better economy when it produced most of its
food
locally unlike recently where most of the
food
items are sourced from other countries.
Secondly
,
food
produced locally by
farmers
are
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gotten at
their
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natural
states
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with
less
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preservatives.
Due to
the increased time these
food
items have to spend
on
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transit, some agents are added to them so as to preserve them and prolong their shelf life. These agents may be injurious to the health of its consumers
whereas
for
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locally manufactured foods, little or no preservatives are needed as the transit time between the consumer and producer is shortened.
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, some green
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vegetables are processed and packaged in order to be transported to different nations
whereas
the same vegetables can be gotten from the local
farmers
when it is most natural and untampered with. In conclusion, I am in agreement with the idea that people should consume foods produced locally because it positively influences the economy and agriculture of the region and
also
makes
food
available in its most natural state.
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