Topic from Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households

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The first line graph plots the percentage of homes which had a

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electrical appliance between 1920 and 2019. Three appliances are shown: refrigerator, vacuum cleaner and washing machine. The second line graph plots the average amount of time each family spent weekly on common household chores during the same period.

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, a steadily increasing proportion of families owned these appliances, especially vacuum cleaners and refrigerators. There is a very strong negative correlation between the percentage of homes with a refrigerator and the number of hours devoted to household chores. In detail, almost no one had a refrigerator in 1920, but one was present in every home by 1980. About three in ten had a vacuum cleaner in 1920, and

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increased to every home by 2000. Washing machines started out with the highest value, 40%, in 1920.

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, it did not reach 100%, but only three-quarters of the homes in 2019. As more households acquired these appliances, less and less time was spent on chores. The number of hours per week dropped by 80%, from 50 to 10 hours per week.

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Topic from Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households

A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Instead of revealing the truth, the mass media very often misguides people. What are the reasons behind this and the visible effects on the society at large?

Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year.