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The world is facing a climate crisis due to human activit. What are some of the most significant causes of climate change and what actions can individuals and governments take reduce its impac?

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Nowadays, the
global
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 is facing
climate
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a climate
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 crisis
due to
 individual activities .
This
 essay will explore some of the
issue
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 that
have
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 resulted from
this
 trend and suggest some solutions.
To begin
 with, the crucial
problem
 of global warming is
due to
 human activities
such
 as driving cars, increasing the number of aeroplanes etc. Humans use many fuels and fossil,
this
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all made - up of a lot of gases and
increasing
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in
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global temperature. To minimize
this
problem
, government and
individual
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individuals
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decrease
the
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energy consumption by decreasing the number of
flight
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flights
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, using public transportation to decrease
use
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 of the cars,
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then
 reducing gas.
Furthermore
,another significant
problem
 is the cutting of trees. Nowadays people
cutting
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 a lot of trees and
due to
this
 reason damage the forest which
are
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is
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 impact
on
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the environment. To mitigate
this
problem
, governments should take some rules to protect wildlife and encourage
the
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people to plant more trees in their backyards and the street in front of their houses. In conclusion, global warming is a serious worldwide issue that arises from human activities and the government
also
 should take some rules for everyone.
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