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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. agree or disagree?

It is thought by some
people
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being
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 wealthy is to provide an opportunity to the person to
aid
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people
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 and it is considered
as
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a crucial thing. In my opinion, helping
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 is a contributing role to become
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rich.
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, there are many things that help
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 to become wealthy. One obvious
benifit
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benefit
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assist
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people
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 is to
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a
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love between all
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, if all
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aid
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 and give
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people
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 or their
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 that will
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in
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their emotions.
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, poor
people
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 can
to
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coverd
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cover
 or buy all their
need
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by
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 that money.
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, Sultan Qaboos gives
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Financial
aid
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for
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 poor counties
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as
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 north Africa and they love him and
whole
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the whole
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our
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 country, so they support us when we face any problems.
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, by
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people
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 all of them will be in the same
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at
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 society and remove all the classes and
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cooperation
competition
 between them.
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, if
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the upper
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upper
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upper-class
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class
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middle
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 and working
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 ,they will become near
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them
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 social state.
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, there are many predominate things that help
person
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a person
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 to become wealthy. First of all,
person's
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a person's
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presude
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presence
. So, if
people
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 have got a
presude
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prelude
 of
themselve
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themselves
 that will make them happy and they live as a
people
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 in the upper
class
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. Second point,
their
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 desire to
working
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 or
stadying
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studying
staying
 hard to serve
themselve
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themselves
.
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,
people
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woh
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who
 study hard and get Certificates and privileges,
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will play a vital role to put them one step ahead when they want to request
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any job. In conclusion,
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 there are many things that help
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 to become wealthy,
but
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helping
people
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 to each other in
society
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that
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is
very
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 critical thing and it has many
benifits
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benefits
more
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than
rich
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being rich
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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