Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. agree or disagree?
It is thought by some
people
that to
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apply
being
wealthy is to provide an opportunity to the person to Change the form of the verb
be
aid
people
and it is considered as
a crucial thing. In my opinion, helping Change preposition
apply
people
is a contributing role to become a
rich. Correct article usage
apply
Otherwise
, there are many things that help people
to become wealthy.
One obvious benifit
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benefit
assist
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assisting
people
is to creat
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create
a
love between all Correct article usage
apply
people
. In other word
, if all Change the wording
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other words
people
aid
and give poor
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to poor
people
or their neighbors
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neighbours
effect
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affect
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their emotions.Change preposition
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Also
, poor people
can to
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coverd
or buy all their Correct your spelling
cover
need
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needs
by
that money. Change preposition
with
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, Sultan Qaboos gives a
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aid
for
poor counties Change preposition
to
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such as
as
north Africa and they love him and Change preposition
in
whole
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the whole
our
country, so they support us when we face any problems. Change preposition
of our
Moreover
, by assist
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assisting
people
all of them will be in the same Add a comma
,people
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at
society and remove all the classes and Change preposition
in
comperation
between them. Correct your spelling
cooperation
competition
For example
, if Correct article usage
the upper
upper
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upper-class
class
aid
middle
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the middle
class
,they will become near of
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them
social state.
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their
On the other hand
, there are many predominate things that help person
to become wealthy. First of all, Add an article
a person
the person
person's
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a person's
presude
. So, if Correct your spelling
presence
people
have got a presude
of Correct your spelling
prelude
themselve
that will make them happy and they live as a Correct your spelling
themselves
people
in the upper class
. Second point, their
desire to Add a missing verb
is their
working
or Wrong verb form
work
stadying
hard to serve Correct your spelling
studying
staying
themselve
. Correct your spelling
themselves
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, people
woh
study hard and get Certificates and privileges, Correct your spelling
who
that
will play a vital role to put them one step ahead when they want to request Correct pronoun usage
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for
any job.
In conclusion, Change preposition
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Although
there are many things that help people
to become wealthy, but
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apply
people
to each other in society
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a society
that
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very
critical thing and it has many Add an article
a very
benifits
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benefits
more
than Correct quantifier usage
apply
rich
.Add a missing verb
being rich
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