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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the changes in the
number
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 of
people
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 in millions who travelled abroad in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the highest
number
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 was in 2005
to
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in
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Europe
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,
while
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 the lowest
number
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 was in 1990
to
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in
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 the
Middle
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 East. First of all, in 1990, the total
number
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 of travels was 448.9
million
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. By far, the highest
number
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 was 280.2
million
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people
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 who travelled to
Europe
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. The second highest
number
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 was 80.5
million
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people
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 who went to America.
On the other hand
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, the least two numbers were
people
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 who travelled to Africa and the
Middle
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 East reaching 18.2 and 9.8
million
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traveller
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travellers
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, respectively.
According to
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 the travellers in 1995, the total
number
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 was 615.2
million
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. Most
people
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 travelled to
Europe
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as
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they stood at 390.3
million
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 travellers.
However
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, the minority, which was 11.3
million
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 visitors, went to the
Middle
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 East. Interestingly, the total
number
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 of travellers in 2000 was 669.2
million
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.
Europe
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 was the most visited country among the other countries as it received 393.2 individuals.
Next,
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the least visited place in 2000 was the
Middle
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 East reaching 13.5
million
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 individuals.
Finally
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, in 2005, the total
number
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 of visitors
in
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apply
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this
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each
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 year was the highest one among the rest of the years.
Europe
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 was at the top of the most visited country in
this
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 year reaching exactly 400.2
million
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 visitors.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, europe, middle, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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