The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the changes in the
number
of
people
in millions who travelled abroad in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the highest
number
was in 2005
to
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Europe
,
while
the lowest
number
was in 1990
to
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the
Middle
East. First of all, in 1990, the total
number
of travels was 448.9
million
. By far, the highest
number
was 280.2
million
people
who travelled to
Europe
. The second highest
number
was 80.5
million
people
who went to America.
On the other hand
, the least two numbers were
people
who travelled to Africa and the
Middle
East reaching 18.2 and 9.8
million
traveller
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, respectively.
According to
the travellers in 1995, the total
number
was 615.2
million
. Most
people
travelled to
Europe
as
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they stood at 390.3
million
travellers.
However
, the minority, which was 11.3
million
visitors, went to the
Middle
East. Interestingly, the total
number
of travellers in 2000 was 669.2
million
.
Europe
was the most visited country among the other countries as it received 393.2 individuals.
Next,
the least visited place in 2000 was the
Middle
East reaching 13.5
million
individuals.
Finally
, in 2005, the total
number
of visitors
in
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this
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each
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year was the highest one among the rest of the years.
Europe
was at the top of the most visited country in
this
year reaching exactly 400.2
million
visitors.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, europe, middle, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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