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Some students to take a gap years after graduating high school to work and/or travel . The advantages and disadvantages of this

#students #gap #years #school #work #travel
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university , many graduated students
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decide to take a gap year for purposes of working
as well as
 travelling . From my point of view , I actually believe that
this
 is an accurate way which could bring useful things for preparations in the future . To start with positive impacts , taking a gap year to work and travel would give students a variety of opportunities to relax and look for meaningful experiences . Because of difficulties and pressures during the period of high
school
 , so
this
 is a rare occasion to rest and recover both mental and physical health . When working and travelling , people may find out a lot of amazing things which they have never
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learned in
school
 time . These could help them to increase knowledge about lots of aspects of life namely : other cultures and the diversity of civilizations .
Moreover
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student
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 will realize special and suitable chances to explore and develop by
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.
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 who graduated high
school
 , after
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 approximately 1 or 2 years working or discovering ,
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would be given many useful experiences and
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 mind to cope effectively with risks and hardships that
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teacher
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 never teach . But on the other
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, spending too much time
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working or visiting can cause some negative influences .
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this
 way , many people tend not to concentrate mostly on
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 , so dropping out of
school
 is possible. The priority of university is building up
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 for people to get ready
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 future careers . And when
student
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 does not look
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necessary
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 thing , they seem to remove a part of
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 for themselves to receive high-paid
works
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. Despite the
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 sometimes taking a gap year for other purpose have serious drawbacks . Personally , I always assume that
that is
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plenty of pressures and exhausted states .
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