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the chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2001

the chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2001
#show #expenditure #two #countries #consumer #goods
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, Books, Perfume, cameras) in
France
 and the
UK
 in 2010. Units are measured in
the
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pounds
 sterling.
Overall
, the bar chart shows that
UK
 spending
are
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 more than
France
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France's
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. The most spending in the
UK
 and
France
 were on
the
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car. Whilst in the
UK
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the least
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least
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 spending was on perfume and in
France
 was on cameras.
Furthermore
, the most significant
differences
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expenditure
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 between the two countries was on cameras. In
term
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 of cars, the
UK
 and
the
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France
spending
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 the most on
this
 about 45000
pounds
 sterling and 400000
pounds
 sterling.
Similarly
, the British
expenditure
 was higher on books than
the
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France
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France's
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 (around 400000
pounds
 and 30000
pounds
.) In the
UK
,
expenditure
 (just over 350000
pounds
) was over double that of
France
, which was only 150000
pounds
.
On the other hand
, the
expenditure
 on remaining goods
France
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 was higher. Almost 400000
pounds
France
 was spending on computers with slightly higher than
UK
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the UK
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 which spent exactly 35000
pound
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pounds
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. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for 200000
pounds
 of
expenditure
 in
France
 but under 150000
pounds
 in the
UK
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, pounds, expenditure with synonyms.
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