the chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2001

the chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2001
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, Books, Perfume, cameras) in
France
and the
UK
in 2010. Units are measured in
the
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pounds
sterling.
Overall
, the bar chart shows that
UK
spending
are
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more than
France
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. The most spending in the
UK
and
France
were on
the
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car. Whilst in the
UK
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the least
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least
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spending was on perfume and in
France
was on cameras.
Furthermore
, the most significant
differences
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expenditure
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between the two countries was on cameras. In
term
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of cars, the
UK
and
the
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France
spending
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the most on
this
about 45000
pounds
sterling and 400000
pounds
sterling.
Similarly
, the British
expenditure
was higher on books than
the
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France
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(around 400000
pounds
and 30000
pounds
.) In the
UK
,
expenditure
(just over 350000
pounds
) was over double that of
France
, which was only 150000
pounds
.
On the other hand
, the
expenditure
on remaining goods
France
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was higher. Almost 400000
pounds
France
was spending on computers with slightly higher than
UK
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the UK
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which spent exactly 35000
pound
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. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for 200000
pounds
of
expenditure
in
France
but under 150000
pounds
in the
UK
.
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