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Some people don't have the natural ability to learn languages. Some schools should force students to learn foreign languages. Agree or Disagree?

People don't have the natural ability to learn
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 and some schools force
students
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 to learn foreign
languages
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 which usually leads them to have bad grades because of
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 I disagree with the education system endorsing the need to learn subjects like French or German,
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 with,
students
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 do not necessarily need to know a foreign
language
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 as it will not help them to accomplish anything.
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, in the UAE most education systems require
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 to take French as their second
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 even though they would not need it in the future unless they plan on taking a job opportunity in France. Peers feel pressured in pursuing these
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 and lack the education they are taught in institutions.
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, institutions should focus more on teaching pupils other topics or subjects that would help them apply the knowledge and understand the skills which would
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 help them find a particular job.
A local
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 research done by
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 in the UAE indicates that 85% of
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 lack in academics
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 being forced into taking a foreign
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 in their curriculum which leads them to have bad scores
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. Neither does the school give them an option of dropping the subject or give them variations of the
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 they prefer to learn, typically.
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, I believe that institutions should not prioritize foreign
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 as they are unhelpful. The system may have its reasoning for teaching
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 the extra
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 but the pupils should decide whether or not they wish to take a foreign
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 based on their capability without failing their academics.
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, they should
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 be given the choice of dropping the subject whenever an individual wishes to.

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