Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is the case that high school
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should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high school programmes. I totally agree with
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and will give my reasons below. Life skills are very important and by doing volunteer
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,
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can develop their communication ability with others, collaboration in a team, time management and organizational skill improvement.
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, after-school activities no longer exist, most of the
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come back home to watch television, play online games or browse the internet. If
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have activities to do, they will not be bored and come up with silly ideas which can be dangerous for them or their surroundings.
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possibly reduce the crime level in the high school age group. By giving
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compulsory
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activities with charitable and community organizations, they are encouraged to be more creative. Skills gained through compulsory
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will not only asset on their CV but
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increase their future employability.
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, they gain more respect towards
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and money as they realize that it is not easy to earn them and hopefully will learn to spend them in a more practical way. Another reason is that healthy life balance and exercise are strongly promoted by the National Health Service. Doing volunteer
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in their spare time prevents them from sitting and doing nothing, but it could help them grow their physical and mental health thanks to unpaid
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as teaching sports
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younger children or helping to clean up the houses for elderly people in near places. In conclusion, I think
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is a very good idea and I hope
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programme will be put into action for high schools shortly
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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