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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart reveals the data of
preferance
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preference
 regarding traditional take-out restaurants among Canadian
people
 in 2015. On the whole, a large segment of
majority
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the majority
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prefered
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preferred
 Chinese or Indian foods and some liked dishes
netive
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native
 to other countries,
while
 there was a certain percentage of
people
 who never purchased
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takeaways. One notable figure can be seen in the figure of
Canadian
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Canadians
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 who liked Chinese
meal
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meals
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, standing at 34%, followed by that
of
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those
prefering
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preferring
 Indian dishes at 26%.
Additionaly
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, Italian and Persian
also
 accounted for
relatively
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a relatively
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 large percentage at about 10% each.
On the other hand
,
although
 they were
minority
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a minority
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, there were individuals whose
preferance
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preference
preferences
 were for Mexican, Japanese and Greek
meal
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meals
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.
There
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 three categories of them recorded their share at 1% respectively
whereas
people
 who ordered Tai meal represented 3% in their number. Interestingly, 11% of
people
 in Canada in the designated year never used take-out service for food.
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,
remaining
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the remaining
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 4% was
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reflected
rejected
 by those who
prefered
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prefer
 other traditional food
than
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to
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 proceeding foods.
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