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Many people believe that it’s better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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An increasing amount of people argue that learning processes go well whenever it is done in a
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 compared to
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individual work. I agree with
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 idea because in a
group
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 people may brainstorm and learn quickly. On the
one
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 hand,
person
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the person
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 who studies particular material alone has a chance to do it in
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 ambience. As in a
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, there may be four or more participants, they tend to make noise.
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 of them,
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, may want to share
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a joke or personal opinion towards a piece of information, and others
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 are likely to say their opinions. In
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 way, all may distract each other,
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this
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 will not happen.
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, those who study alone
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 may have their own ideas and opinions. Students express their own
view
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 when
writting
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writing
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summarising
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 that they have read.
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, in
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project
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 learners may find groupmates'
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ideas
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 better than personal
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one
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. As
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 result of
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,
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 can end up being afflicted by others' ideas even if
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's opinion is equally right.
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, learning with groupmates can be funny and beneficial. When students are learning something new in a
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, they may ask for help to break a difficult theme down from other
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 members.
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,
for
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most students have a hard time learning new words, but other may assist in learning jointly or finding associations
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 words.
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, it may not be
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 dull and mundane
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 as
student
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students
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 thought before working in a
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.
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 to that, being in
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group
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 means brainstorming every
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 of
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a certain
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topic
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 together. Learners have a debate or conversation where there can be a range of ideas and good arguments.
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,
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 tends to broaden his or her horizon. In conclusion,
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 I believe that there are some pluses of learning solely, I think
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 of
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 work are more beneficial.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative problem-solving
  • exchange of ideas
  • peer support
  • social interaction
  • fosters
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • motivate
  • isolation
  • feedback
  • misconceptions
  • self-paced
  • retention
  • self-discipline
  • lifelong learning
  • customization
  • engagement
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