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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more  money  should  be  spent  on researching other planet to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe more financial resources should be allocated to universe studies in order to discover a new habitable environment for humans
due to
 the increasingly harsh living conditions on
Earth
. Personally, I agree entirely with
this
 view for a variety of reasons.
To begin
 with, the population explosion is the first urgent matter urging results from space studies. The fast-growing population in most countries and territories all over the world poses a threat to land and accommodation capacity. Especially in densely populated cities like New York, as reported in Times in 2020, the ever-increasing rate of birth increases house prices to double that in the past.
This
 forces space scientists to work hard on projects and more cash should be paid to produce habitats on other planets.
Furthermore
, the depletion of natural resources,
such
 as fuel and water is considered to be another serious problem that people need to concern about. Over-consumption of non-renewable resources for
such
 purposes as production, manufacturing, or factories made them become scared.
This
 means that it would become more and more challenging for humans to continue living on
Earth
.
In addition
, many theories have been proved by experts that the end of the
earth
 can be expected
as a consequence
 of factors like pollution, global warming, etc and maybe there is life on another planet
that is
 suitable for living
such
 as Mars.
Therefore
, it is justified and worth investing plenty of money in discovering the possibility of life in outer space. In conclusion, I strongly suppose that financial investments in discovering another planet as a new home to replace the
Earth
are
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 reasonable.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
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