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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In their advertising,
businesses
nowdays
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 sometimes stress that their
products
 are new in some way. From my point of view, some
businesses
 want to have good
products
 to give to the people, but
usually
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 they worry about their
products
are
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being
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 newer than some other's
businesses
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businesses'
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products
.
In
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I
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think
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 it is a negative development, because when
businesses
 stress about the quality of their
products
, sometimes they do something wrong
while
 they are producing them. It is good when
the
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businesses
 take care of and look after their
products
 but with a limit.
According to
 some experts, when you take a lot of care of something, you will probably do some things, about it, wrong. From my own experience, I was trying to make three school projects, which my teachers asked me to do, and despite my hard work and because I was stressed about the projects I had to do, I
finally
 failed because I had made a lot of mistakes.
To sum up
,
businesses
nowdays
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 should not stress about their
products
 being new in some way.
Besides
that
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 they should calm down and be careful
on
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about
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 what they are producing.
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  • advertising
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  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
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