Some people think that tourism is one of the helpful ways to increase a countries state. However, others believe that tourism can only damage traditional rules bringing own affect to a society and cause other troubles. To what extent do you agree with?

Many
persons
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think one of the most profitable business section for a state could be the
touristic
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tourist
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area,
others
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while others
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believes
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tourism
have
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too many drawbacks and can disturb the local lifestyle and peace. In my opinion ,promoting touristry in a
reagion
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region
could have more benefits than
desadvantages
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disadvantages
for many
reason
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which
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Firstly
. every visitor's expenditure is a plus in the
guvernment
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government
and the
locals
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local's
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budget. The
holiday makers
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holidaymakers
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will spend money
for
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food, presents , accommodation and other think regarded to relaxation and entertainment. More people visit a place more money will be spent in that county
incrising
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increasing
the state budget and the locals well being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost
  • economy
  • cultural exchange
  • over-tourism
  • environmental impacts
  • cultural heritage
  • strain
  • local resources
  • commercialization
  • traditions
  • exacerbate
  • inequality
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