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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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table
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 and pie chart
illustrate
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 the
budget
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 of police in
practical
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the practical
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area
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areas
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 of the UK in the years 2017 and 2018. the
table
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 gives the
informantion
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information
 about
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the soure
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soure
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source
sure
 of
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budget
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the budget
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 and the pie chart gives
the
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information about how it was spent.
overall
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, it is clear from the
table
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 that the most money was supported by the national
goverment
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government
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this
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 two years. the most proportion of
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budget
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the budget
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 was spent on
emplyees'
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employees
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employee's
 salaries.
according to
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 the
table
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, the total
budget
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 of
police
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the police
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 was 304.7 million in 2017.
these
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budget
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 came from three aspects, including national
goverment
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government
 (175.5m), local taxes(91.2m) and other sources(38m). by 2018, the total
budget
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 increased to 318.6m. looking at the pie chart, 75%
budget
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 was expensed on officers and staff salaries,
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this
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 figure for salaries
reduced
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 to 69% in 2018.
by contrast
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, the proportion of
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technology
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budget
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 spending rosed from 8% to 14%. the spending on building and transport remained at 17%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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