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Nowadays people are living longer, and some believe that this can contribute to people’s development. What are the causes of this change? Is it a positive or negative phenomenon?

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Nowadays, scientific innovation has got breakthroughs. These advanced technologies benefit
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.
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, flow the development of
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, a lot of
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 are living longer.
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 phenomenon led to the global average age are gradually climbed. In
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 current situation, some
people
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 believe that
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 can dedicate
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’s development. But in my opinion,
longevity
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 is harmful to human progress.
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 are living longer, and will explain the
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 of
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 is negative. There is the main reason
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 the
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 the progress of
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 can make
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longevity
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 by
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 and chemical reagents.
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, nowadays, patients depend on operations and medical methods to overcome illness. In the past, if someone has cancer,
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 man must die. But now, we have a related vaccine to prevent cancer. So the improvement of
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longevity
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. The point about the more
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 can dedicate the human development I against. There are two explanations for
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in my view, more and more
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's
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 can increase the stress of social economics. And it can aggravate the congestion in the city.
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I believe,
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 actuality can lead to the environment have polluted. Because the large population have more equipment. So
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 need to deforestation and find fossil fuel. The result is global warming. Increasing global temperatures result in less rain.
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,
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’s long life is sure to have terrible effects on the environment. In the end, I think that the
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 of
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 brings dedication is limited. Oppositely,
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 who are living longer caused many serious issues. Encouraging
people
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 to follow the rule of nature is a good idea.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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