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Some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative view is that they can adapt to a new environment by establishing a minority community. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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During centuries the trend of immigration increased
due to
 the globalizasion world and
due to
 new
life
's possibilities.
People
 argue around two different behavioures of
immigrants
: on one hand they should adopt the local
culture
 and habits of the new
country
,
on the other hand
 they should integrate in the new
country
 introducing a minority community.
According to
 these different alternatives, i think
immigrants
 should try to adapt both alternative in order to have a better
life
 in the new
country
. In relation to the adoption of the local
culture
,
people
 when start a new
life
 abroad have to pay attention to the
culture
 of the new
country
.
However
 it represents an obstacles of moving abroad, as in different
country
 the
culture
 could be totally different.
Moreover
, the respetc of the local
country
 represents a requirement for a better integration. Indeed, for some
people
, immigrats needs to adopt the local habits,
such
 as food and religoius if they want to feel a real habitants of the new
country
.
People
 argue around a different alternative of starting a new
life
 in a foreign
country
.
Immigrants
 can establish a minority community in the new
country
, feeling more at home as they can continue to live their
life
 as in their home
country
. Nowdays, in each
country
 it's becoming always more common find foreign community:
immigrants
 can meet their compatriots , feeling at home and ,
for instance
, celebrating their festivity together. In my opinion, everyone when go abroad should have the possibility of following wathever
culture
 they prefer.
Otherwise
,
immigrants
, since they are starting a new
life
 in a foreign
country
, they should respect the habits and cultures of the new State.
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