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Under British and Australian laws, a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant’s past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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The law court process in different countries follows different rules,
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 there are some practices, that, I believe, should be unified
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across
 the globe for all criminal
cases
. In my opinion, the information
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 the defendant's past criminal record should be accessible
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 the jury as it might play the primary role in the court
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decision
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jury of the criminal law is not only making
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life changing
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desicions
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decisions
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 for the person who
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committed
crime
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,
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 but
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society. In
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 as murder,
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record
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 of the same
crime
commitment
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 might mean that the person who
repeaditly
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repeatedly
commited
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committed
 the same
crime
 did not learn his lesson and should be punished with
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sentence
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. Hiding
this
 information from the
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judge
 might
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 the repetition of the same
crime
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 after the defendant serves the
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sentence
.
However
, we can look at the situations where the defendant has been accused of the
crime
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 but has a previous record,
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 could lead to
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this
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cases
 are very rare in
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global practice that should not be taken into consideration. In the common world, with so many types of security systems
commiting
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committing
crime
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a crime
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 became more and more challenging, but it doesn't prevent the
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society
 from
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appearance
 of different
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 of crimes, in
this
 way I believe all the information should be shared with the
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judge
judges
 prior to making
desicion
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decision
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