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Most writers of fiction do not earn enough money to live from their writing.  Do you think the government should give them financial assistance to help encourage good literature?

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One of the major issues that concern our society today is whether
people
 in power should help financially
some
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 kind of jobs which are not enough well-paid,
such
 as writers of
fiction
 or not. Strong arguments exist for
this
 viewpoint, which implies that it is worth examining that before reaching any conclusion.
To begin
 with, to my mind, literature plays a pivotal role in not only adults' life but
also
 children's. One of the advantages of literature is that youngsters have the opportunity to enrich their vocabulary by reading
fiction
books
. It is widely known that
this
 kind of
books
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book
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include
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 academic vocabulary.
Hence
, the youth can expand their knowledge.
Also
,
fiction
books
 can be beneficial for
people
's personalities, developing their creativity. To be more precise, numerous readers have started writing their own
books
 after reading some quality
fiction
books
. In
this
 way, their hobby became their job which is positive for their working life.
However
, many
people
 who do
this
 job struggle to make ends meet,
as
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 a result, they give it up. Taking all the above into consideration, I believe that government should offer financial allowances
to
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this
 kind of job because there are many benefits to be gained from.
Otherwise
, fewer and fewer individuals will choose to write
fiction
books
 and
this
 will have detrimental effects on
people
's education. In conclusion, it is my firm belief that
fiction
books
 and general literature are essential and
people
 have the chance to expand their knowledge through them. Never before have we seen so many
fiction
books
 have been written and we need to be ensured that it will continue.
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