Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

in the contemporary era,
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building sites can be constructed
by
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a long
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long planned
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period
. Many
advocate
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that if the
companies
build the apartments quickly as
much
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as possible, they would attract more people who tend to buy these flats. In
this
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I intend to delve into the merits and the
demirts
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demerits
of both
approachs
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approaches
.
To begin
with, the instructions
companies
have to investigate deeply before
starting
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lay the foundation of
building
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the building
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.
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the
period
, many engineers and
also
land vehicles work
on
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the
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particular area. Obviously, the manufacturers tend to utilize
high quality
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materials
in the
construction
sites.
However
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particular reasons sometimes delay the working
period
. If some raw
materials
such
as concrete, steel or
woods
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wood
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run out of
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, the engineers are obliged to offer a number of
construction
materials
.
On the other hand
, the
construction
supervisor is
more
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significant issue in
this
case. Because
,
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during the marketing
period
selling department introduce distinctive certificates of conformity to receivers.
Hence
, acquiring
this
type of
documents
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is significant for
reliability
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of the entrepreneurs, but
is
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required
to
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long
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time. On the other, hand in today's world residents who live in cities mostly tend to purchase the building block. Because
accomodate
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accommodate
in the flat has more benefits rather than detached houses.
Therefore
, if there is demand growth from the side of an apartment, most
companies
acquire more market shares,
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they
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would tend to accelerate the
construction
procedure.
As a result
of
this
decision, the apartments would be constructed with
low quality
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materials
and
also
none of them would be considered earthquake resistance
building
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buildings
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. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, I disagree with the latter, because if the building blocks are not monitored well, only the
companies
are interested in gaining
the
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profit,
in
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the future, the citizens will face detrimental consequences.
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