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People will buy a product if it has quality or fulfill their needs. There is no need for advertisement and considered as a form of entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

#people #product #quality #advertisement #form #entertainment
There is no doubt that individuals will purchase
a
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 item if it has good quality
as well as
fulfill
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 their needs. I completely disagree with
this
 statement that there is no need for advertisement . The first and foremost reason is that
people
 need advertisement in order to gain knowledge about different kind of
products
 which is popular in the markets.
People
 can know
benefits
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the benefits
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 of using
that
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that product
those products
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products
 after seeing ads.
For example
, if
people
 buy any lotions after watching ads
then
 they know very well how to use
that
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that product
those products
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products
. Not only
this
,
people
 have a lot of choices
then
 they can choose the product
according to
 them.
That is
 why,
people
 can learn many new things from advertisements.
In addition
 to it,
advertisment
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advertisement
advertising
 is
benefical
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beneficial
 for both sellers
as well as
 buyers. Sellers can
promoto
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promote
 their
products
 through advertisements and buyers can get information about
products
 and get know about deals which are going on
that
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at that
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 time. So, advertisements
has
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 plenty of advantages for both sellers and customers. In conclusion, it can be noted that
advantisements
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advertisements
advertisement
has
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have
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 many advantages because
people
 can gain
knowlegde
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knowledge
 about
products
 and
campanies
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companies
 can
promoto
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promote
 their goods through ads.
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